Journal Entry: Day 95

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It was raining when Dad left to go find the Gonzales.  I think it was the first time I have seen rain since this whole ordeal started.  Courtney was all tears watching him leave. Once you could no longer see them in the distance Courtney latched on to me and did not let go.  She crushed all the air out of my lungs with inhuman strength. Lily had to step in to break it up. Once she saw me go from bright red to blue.  Pretty sure Courtney bruised one of my ribs. Lily lead Courtney back inside the cabin. Mom had to go inside once Dad got into the Beast Brooke was a mess too.  I even saw a few tear from Lily. Going to be a lot of emotions in the cabin. I wanted to warn Will a head of time before he came over. Sure he has a sister, but only one sister.  He has never witnessed the storm emotion from three at once.

 

Jobs still needed to be done even though Dad was leaving and it was raining.  I managed to save Will from the estrogen onslaught once he arrived. Each person deals with stress in their own way.  Crying and a lot of hugging was not how I handled it, but it worked for my sisters. Today’s job would have been to cut some firewood, but I talked mom into letting us clean the kitchen in the mess hall. Little did Mom know is that I cleaned most of it already. Giving Will and I some free time after we finished what was left.  The mess hall has a large screen tv and a few arcade games cabinets in it. We got a few hours of goofing off in and none was the wiser.

 

Will and I headed  back to our cabin in the early afternoon.  Mom and Lily cooked dinner which was fantastic.  Courtney, Brooke and Beth baked a large cake for dessert.  Everyone seem to be over this mornings ordeal. While we ate Courtney went of the basics on how to play DnD with Will and Beth.  Then later in the evening Olivia and Megan came over. Will got strong armed into playing a fighter while Beth the cleric. We played long into the night until Mom broke up the fun. Tomorrow was still a school day and that stack of firewood still needed to be chopped.  Mom checked in with Dad once everyone left. It seems everything is going to plan on their end. The rescue party should reach the spot where the Gonzales last checked in sooner than expected. I still have a bad feeling about them being out with all those charred. Who knows how bad things have gotten close to the main city.

 

 

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Child of the DayStar

 

Child Of The Daystar

Book one of the Wing of War Series

By Bryce O’ Connor

Book review by Jacob Pelley

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Book Blurb
Among the scattered fringe cities bordering the Cienbal desert, the true name of the Monster of Karth is spoken only in whispers…

Raz i’Syul Arro.

A sellsword of the utmost caliber, Raz is a killer of paramount skill and highest regard. Towering tall even amongst the atherian, he is the only of his kind to live free in the “civilized” confines of mankind’s varied cultures. He has no need of loyalties, his sole affections pledged to the gold crowns that buy his time and skills. Wed to his blades, Raz’s only friends are the Moon and Her Stars and the shadows they bring with the night.

But Raz was not born to the mercenary’s way, to the butchery and battle of day-by-day survival. Raz, like a sword, was hammered from steel and fire and ashy smoke, forged on the ruins of an old life. And Raz knows who he owes this new path to, this carved way of blood and iron. The Monster of Karth, after all, would never forget who gave him that name.

And some debts can’t be paid in gold…

 

Settings 

Bryce O’Connor did a great job of world building in this book. At times I could feel the heat of the dessert sun on my neck. Other times the chill of the winter winds from the north. The pacing in this book was good. Something you could read and come back to easliy.  This is a epic fantasy book and I always judge these books harshly for its settings. The Auhor did a great job on coming through on that end. Yes there is magic, other races and monsters that feel natrual to this  world. Tolken would be pleased with the work.

 

Main Characters 

The main and supporting character are beileveable and likeable. Raz is a well rounded protagonist. Even though he is not human he is written like someone you could have dinner with. I was not a big fan of Sryah.  I usally wanted to get past the Syrah chapters and get back to Raz. Though Sryahs development is important  her first chapters are  weaker.

 

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Recommendation and Ratings 

If you are a fan of Fanstay, Epic fanstay, Horror, Dark fanstay this could be a good fit for you. This book is not for people under the age of 16 as it gets a little graphics. I would give this book 4/5 stars. The only reason why I knocked of 1 star is that I can’t reccomend it to people of all ages. If you want to check out more of the Authors work you can find it here. https://www.bryceoconnorbooks.com/dragon-fantasy-the-wings-of-war/. Which BTW he has one of the nicest Author web pages I have ever seen.

State of the book day 91

State of the book

It has been over 91 days since my book the Wanderer’s Curse has been released. I have sold over 150 copies in that time. That is 1.6 books a day which is fantastic. Adjusting for all the debt to profits I have made $115. That is accounting for a new suit,  a 10X20 poster, event cost, hosting and domain for the website. Though it has been a long time since I have actually sold a book as of late. Here are a few things I have been up to since the launch of the book.

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Book blurb nightmare

I had to rewrite the blurb a lot. It took a total of 10 rewrites to finally get it where it needed to be. That is not just rewriting the same paragraph over and over again it was 10 new and unique blurbs every time. These are some of the ones that didn’t make the final cut. My coauthor Sarah finally came through with the best one.

Blurb rejects

Maazer Basilisk is the trusted leader of the wanderers of Helix, a settlement fighting to survive in a toxic world gone mad. But civilization comes at a cost, and to ensure humanity’s survival behind the walls of Helix, someone has to travel beyond. It’s a dangerous job, something Maazer becomes all too aware of when his partner is killed and he’s left alone for the first time in living memory.
Now he has been tasked with finding two new recruits, and the most obvious candidates are best friends Jennifer Lacewing and Collins Foss. Observed for years by the powers that be, both yearn to serve their settlement, but is becoming a wanderer what they truly want? Even being in contact with Maazer is perilous, and if they are chosen, it means becoming Outcasts…and leaving any chance at a normal life behind.

Since the fall of the last great city, Granite Heart, the settlement of Helix has been struggling to survive in a dangerous and toxic land. How does humanity continue? Sheer will? Partly. A stubborn unwillingness to die? Definitely.

Jennifer and her best friend Collins, teenagers that have been observed for years, are about to be given the worst job placement ever: Wanderer. Wanderers brave the wastes to protect the colony from beasts, bugs & bandits. If life wasn’t already hard enough, Jennifer and Collins are sent outside the colony’s limits on a simple mission that quickly becomes rife with murder, blackmail, and peril. What is at stake?-father’s life/exile, friendship, Kara’s life, the town under attack, frenemy Kara

Fixed Blurb

Jennifer Lacewing is a lonely teenager whose father is too important to be around. Surviving in Helix, a last bastion to the small human existence on a decaying Earth, she longs to be a peaceful farmer. But things never go as planned. When Jennifer and Collins, her best friend, are forced to join the Wanderers, a small group that can mysteriously survive outside the safety of Helix’s fences, she is devastated.

And something else is amiss. Was it a coincidence that she became a Wanderer at the same time her father has been falsely accused of murder?” In a rush against time, Jennifer must complete her Wanderer training and clear her father’s name…or lose him forever.

Here are the resources that I used to fix the blurb

Starla Huchton was a big help in reworking the Blurb. Her site has one of the best run downs on how to write a better blurb.
https://www.starlahuchton.com/crafting-the-dreaded-blurb/

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Dave Chesson over at Kindlepreneur has a huge wealth of knowledge that is free on how to become better at being a author. Dave does care about you being successful. He took the time out of his busy schedule to give me advice and looked over my many many blurbs revisions. He also has a great podcast and created KDP rocket which is useful for making amazon adword campaigns.

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Lastley under the recommendation of Dave Chesson I read the book How to write a sizzling synopsis by Bryan Cohen. It was an easy read, but gave important insights on what to do. I read the book in under 3 hours and I am not the fastest of readers. His basic rundown on how to write a blurb looks like this
1:Introduce the main character
2: Establish the Beginning stakes for the character
3:Escalate the tension for the character
4:Repeat steps 1-3 for additional main characters
5:Bring the characters together
6: Raise the stakes even higher for the characters
7: Put the characters in the ultimae danger of failing,dying ETC

Once you have the beta Blurb trim it down more
1: simplify as much as possible
2: Trade down words
3: Remove ant phrases that will slow the reader down
4:Read out loud and for areas that need additional emotional Impact
5: Ensure that you end with a Bang
6:Get feedback
7: Read it out aloud one more time
Bonus try to keep it under 300 words
But you should read the book as well!

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For those that like twitter @Jac_Onue enjoys helping people with thier blurbs to. He helped me with mine and gave constructive feedback.

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What I am working on now

I am trying to network more, so much more than what I have been doing. Also reaching out to different book bloggers and podcaster. Next week I will going to be on Central Valley Talk.com, working on getting on to a local tv news station, and hosting a small event here in town. Finally getting in touch with artist for reworking the book cover and hydra logo, but I really like my cover right now.

 

On the Subject of the Unforeseen Consequences of Book Blogging — By The Past Due Review

Seeing as it has been over two years since I began The Past Due Review, I thought it would be interesting to reflect on some of the unforeseen consequences of running a book blog. I realize that I have expanded my content to include movie reviews and Music Monday posts, but this site began with […]

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